3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

　　4.自己纠错，写下反思。

　　五、备考演练

A

　　缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

　　写作要求：

　　1.词数在100左右。

　　2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

　　3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

　　Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest …

B

　　阅读电视广告词：“If we don‘t save water，the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

　　提示：

　　1.生活离不开水。

　　2.可饮用水在减少。

　　3.水污染严重。

　　4.应保护水源，再利用水。

　　思路点拨与参考答案

　　A. ［思路点拨］：

　　①文体：记叙文。

　　②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

　　③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

　　Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. But a few years ago，some of them paid no attention to protecting the environment.They threw their rubbish，such as plastic bags，fruit skins and waste paper on the ground.Sometimes they broke trees，picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily，great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins，and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well.They bring their own meals instead of cooking to prevent starting a forest fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

　　B. ［思路点拨］：

　　①夹叙夹议（说明现状，谈谈感想）。

　　②时态：一般现在时态。

　　③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用（写作意图）。

　　Water is very important to humans.We can‘t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem to care about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour dirty water into rivers and lakes.Water pollution is getting more and more serious.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it.If we don‘t do this，the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.

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